[Clfs-dev] Noticed a few trivial rough spots in CLFS embedded

[nu shto]

Just one stylistic comment: I think it'd be worthwhile to point out how the
gcc-final build differs from the gcc-static build. I know it is pointed out
in the introduction, but it might be helpful to reiterate what is going on.
I found myself pausing to make sure that there wasn't just a problem in the
book since I had just built gcc and now I was suddenly building it again
with what appeared to be an identical procedure (it's hard to mentally diff
long strings of configure flags).

Also, a few trivial writing problems:

$ git diff
diff --git a/BOOK/bootable/common/kernel.xml
b/BOOK/bootable/common/kernel.xml
index d227fa2..e2acf5b 100644
--- a/BOOK/bootable/common/kernel.xml
+++ b/BOOK/bootable/common/kernel.xml
@@ -45,7 +45,7 @@
         components are console/video, disk, and network. With out these
built
         in, the system will not function properly. It is recommended to
         configure the kernel without modules in order to conserve disk
space
-        and to simplify.</para></note>
+                 and to simplify (the boot process, or ...
what?).</para></note>

 <screen os="g"><userinput>make ARCH=${CLFS_ARCH}
CROSS_COMPILE=${CLFS_TARGET}- menuconfig</userinput></screen>

diff --git a/BOOK/materials/common/creatingbuilddir.xml
b/BOOK/materials/common/creatingbuilddir.xml
index 0f809de..54f1c6c 100644
--- a/BOOK/materials/common/creatingbuilddir.xml
+++ b/BOOK/materials/common/creatingbuilddir.xml
@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@

 <screen><userinput>export CLFS=/mnt/clfs</userinput></screen>

-  <para>Ensure that this new directory has permissions that are too
restrictive
+  <para>Ensure that this new directory has permissions that are not too
restrictive
     such that you can write to it as a non-root user.</para>

 <screen><userinput>chmod 777 ${CLFS}</userinput></screen>

Keep up the good work!

Cheers,
Paul
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