[Clfs-commits] commit: r4107 - in /trunk/BOOK/boot: alpha/aboot.xml common/changingowner.xml common/pwdgroup.xml common/settingenviron.xml common/sysvinit.xml

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Author: chris at beaker67.com
Date: Tue Dec 16 20:49:04 2008
New Revision: 4107

Log:
Text fixes

Modified:
    trunk/BOOK/boot/alpha/aboot.xml
    trunk/BOOK/boot/common/changingowner.xml
    trunk/BOOK/boot/common/pwdgroup.xml
    trunk/BOOK/boot/common/settingenviron.xml
    trunk/BOOK/boot/common/sysvinit.xml

Modified: trunk/BOOK/boot/alpha/aboot.xml
==============================================================================
--- trunk/BOOK/boot/alpha/aboot.xml (original)
+++ trunk/BOOK/boot/alpha/aboot.xml Tue Dec 16 20:49:04 2008
@@ -29,8 +29,8 @@
    not need to reinstall it. aboot is just a chain loader and has no bearing on
    the system build.</para>
 
-   <para os="c">After you get the build copied to when you can boot, you will need
-   to issue the following command:</para>
+   <para os="c">After you get the build copied to the system that it will
+   boot from, you will need to issue the following command:</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>swriteboot -f3 /dev/sda /boot/bootlx
 abootconf /dev/sda 1</userinput></screen>

Modified: trunk/BOOK/boot/common/changingowner.xml
==============================================================================
--- trunk/BOOK/boot/common/changingowner.xml (original)
+++ trunk/BOOK/boot/common/changingowner.xml Tue Dec 16 20:49:04 2008
@@ -14,7 +14,7 @@
   directory and all of its subdirectories  are owned by the user
   <systemitem class="username">clfs</systemitem>, a user that exists only
   on the host system. For security reasons, the ${CLFS} root directory and
-  all of it subdirectories should be owned by
+  all of its subdirectories should be owned by
   <systemitem class="username">root</systemitem>. Change the ownership
   for ${CLFS} and its subdirectories by running this command:</para>
 

Modified: trunk/BOOK/boot/common/pwdgroup.xml
==============================================================================
--- trunk/BOOK/boot/common/pwdgroup.xml (original)
+++ trunk/BOOK/boot/common/pwdgroup.xml Tue Dec 16 20:49:04 2008
@@ -47,7 +47,7 @@
 EOF</userinput></screen>
 
   <para os="b">The actual password for <systemitem class="username">root</systemitem>
-  (the <quote>::</quote> used here is just a placeholder and allow you to login
+  (the <quote>::</quote> used here is just a placeholder and allows you to login
   with no password) will be set later.</para>
 
   <variablelist os="c">

Modified: trunk/BOOK/boot/common/settingenviron.xml
==============================================================================
--- trunk/BOOK/boot/common/settingenviron.xml (original)
+++ trunk/BOOK/boot/common/settingenviron.xml Tue Dec 16 20:49:04 2008
@@ -29,7 +29,8 @@
   (the two are equivalent) ensures that everything will work as expected
   on your temporary system.</para>
 
-  <para>By putting <filename class="directory">/tools/bin</filename> at
+  <para>By putting <filename class="directory">/tools/bin</filename> and
+  <filename class="directory">/tools/sbin</filename> at
   the end of the standard <envar>PATH</envar>, all the programs installed in
   <xref linkend="chapter-temp-system"/> are only picked up by the shell
   if they have not yet been built on the target system. This configuration

Modified: trunk/BOOK/boot/common/sysvinit.xml
==============================================================================
--- trunk/BOOK/boot/common/sysvinit.xml (original)
+++ trunk/BOOK/boot/common/sysvinit.xml Tue Dec 16 20:49:04 2008
@@ -97,7 +97,7 @@
 </literal>
 EOF</userinput></screen>
 
-    <para>If your system has a serial console run the following command to add
+    <para>If your system has a serial console, run the following command to add
     the entry to <filename>${CLFS}/etc/inittab</filename>.</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>cat >> ${CLFS}/etc/inittab << "EOF"
@@ -105,7 +105,7 @@
 </literal>
 EOF</userinput></screen>
 
-   <para>Finally, Add the end line to <filename>${CLFS}/etc/inittab</filename>.</para>
+   <para>Finally, add the end line to <filename>${CLFS}/etc/inittab</filename>.</para>
 
 <screen><userinput>cat >> ${CLFS}/etc/inittab << "EOF"
 <literal># End /etc/inittab</literal>